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June 18, 2013

Paul asks…

How is the prolouge to my book? (Please help)?

*I wrote this and own all rights to the content*

Basically, the book is about people who, after death on earth, have been called to the soul world to serve Letum (death) in his quest to reap the living. Some of the don’t agree with what Death does so they form a resistance. Now it’s Death’s help vs. The Resistance, and it’s turning into a great battle. Sorry for any spelling mistakes, I was on wattpad.com. Also, there are bits of Latin in there, so don’t be alarmed.

Alright, here it is:

~~Prolouge~~

I stand over her body now. She’s breathing heavily, and her face in almost un-recognizable from the damage I‘ve caused. It could be described as a swollen, bloody mass sitting on top of a neck. Almost like an overgrown cherry. The corners of my mouth curl up into a devlish grin as I slide my sword back into my hilt, because I‘ve done it. After we’ve chased each other halfway around the world and nearly destroyed the landcapes, I‘ve finally done it. I‘ve won. It’s a feeling I‘ve never loved more than anything else. Even when I was human, it was something that was always important. The pride, the glory, the success. I want it more than anything else. No, I need it more than anything else.

“Hey,” says a voice under me. The woman, Misericordia, stares at me from her half-shut eye. It’s like a bright blue gem in a sea of blood. I‘m surprised she’s even managing to breath, yet alone talk. “What?” I ask, annoyed at her consitency. “What’s that smile for?” Her vocie is dry and limp. You can hear the life leaving, but she still continues to talk. “Well, what’s it for? You haven’t won yet.” I scoff at her ignorance. Is she not aware of her condition right now? “Your kidding right?” I reply. “That’s really weird, because I‘d almost swear I‘m looking at a just about dead body right now.” She grins sheepishly at this. “No darling, that’s not what I mean.” With the little ounce of strength she has left in her, she brings her arms up to her neck and rips of the locket she’s has as long as I‘ve remembered. “Read this,” she says. I snatch the locket from her hand and look at her questionably. I open it up, and on the inside it reads:

“What is true of the individual will be tomorrow true of the whole nation if individuals will but refuse to lose heart and hope.” -Mahatma Ghandi

Staring at the quote, I‘m more baffled than anything else. What is she trying to say? Is she trying to trick me or something? Fustrated, I throw it back onto her body and say, “Yeah, ok. What’s your point?” She lets out a weak chuckle, which manages to irriate me even further. “You really don’t get it do you.” I‘m not sure what to say. I‘ve heard the quote before, but what connection could it have here? “Each member of the resitance somehow, and in some way, carries this quote with them.” She grabs the locket off of her chest and holds it in her hand tightly. “Me being gone won’t change anything. The only thing that will happen is that we will become stronger than ever. You see, as long as we have this heart and hope, nothing will get in our way. Even if we have to sacrafice our lives for what we believe in.” I‘ve had enough. She’s ruined my mood, and I don’t even really feel like I won anymore. I take my sword back out of it’s hilt and whip it around to fully extend it in front of me.

“Lucror, you know more than anything what Letum has us do is wrong.” Her tone as changed, and she sounds a little more gentle than before. “Even though you are no longer human, you still have a consience. I know you’ve thought about joining the resitance. Maybe that’s what’s best for you. To be honest, I know that’s best for you. If you’d just come to your senses and-” “Mom,” I cut her off. “Honestly…Shut up.” Without hesitation, I grab her anima orgio, pull her body towards my blade, and plunge it deep into her skull.

Alright, tell me what you think please. :3

Administrator answers:

I would suggest you try to work on the flow of your piece. There are many instances that you chop through the description of what is going on, and that needs to improve. There really is nothing more bothersome than quick transitions. Here is an example;
. The corners of my mouth curl up into a devlish grin as I slide my sword back into my hilt, because I’ve done it.
“Because I’ve done it” murdered the sentence in a not so good way. Leaving out that bold cut of description and easing through it would have made it sound much better.
Flow is of utmost importance when writing, you just need to work on it a bit more but it can be done. Otherwise, your prolouge is interesting.

Donna asks…

can you handle the heat and answer this long survey with long answers. remember, copy and past please !?

if you do not copy and paste your answer will be disqualified!

1)what is your real age?

2)what age do you think it is appropriate for someone to have cell phone?

3)do you believe in whipping kids if they did something wrong?

4)about how long do you stay on yahoo answers each day?

5)what is your favorite face product to use and why?

6)what is your all-time favorite show?

7)do you have an interest in animals?

8)are you for or against abortion?

9)do you prefer living in the country or the city?

10) what is one of the most beautiful sites you hv=ave ever seen before?

11)who is your rolemodel?

12)do you believe in animal testing or not?

13)do you have a myspace?

14) have you ever gotten a disease what is/was it?

15) what is your favorite flower?

16)eve got a speeding ticket?

17)do you prefer something salted or sweet?

18)what food could you live on forever?

19) what is one of the coolest items in your room?

hold, on i‘ll put more
20) what is your favorite book?

21) what is your favorite song?

22) do you a deer hunter?

23) what is your favorite drink to drink?

24)when did you get the internet?

25) who are you voting for president?

26) what is your favorite kind of cake?

27) what us your favorite kind of cookie?

28) has anyone ever been rude to you on this site?

29)are your paretns divorced?

30) do youl like this survey?

Administrator answers:

1)what is your real age?
47

2)what age do you think it is appropriate for someone to have cell phone?
DEPENDS ON WHEN THEY ARE RESPONSIBLE ENOUGH

3)do you believe in whipping kids if they did something wrong?
I DON’T BELIEVE IN INFLICTING PAIN ON THOSE I LOVE.

4)about how long do you stay on yahoo answers each day?
ABOUT 6 HOURS ON AND OFF.

5)what is your favorite face product to use and why?
CARMEX – DON’T LIKE DRY LIPS

6)what is your all-time favorite show?
I LOVE LUCY

7)do you have an interest in animals?
I LOVE ANIMALS, ESPECIALLY MONKEYS

8)are you for or against abortion?
PRO CHOICE

9)do you prefer living in the country or the city?
SMALL CITY

10) what is one of the most beautiful sites you hv=ave ever seen before?
YOSEMITE

11)who is your rolemodel?
MY DAD

12)do you believe in animal testing or not?
NO

13)do you have a myspace?
DELETED IT

14) have you ever gotten a disease what is/was it?
NO

15) what is your favorite flower?
DAISY

16)eve got a speeding ticket?
NO

17)do you prefer something salted or sweet?
SALTED

18)what food could you live on forever?
PIZZA

19) what is one of the coolest items in your room?
MY COMPUTER

20) what is your favorite book?
SWAN SONG – ROBERT MCCAMMON

21) what is your favorite song?
STRONGER – KANYE WEST

22) do you a deer hunter?
NO

23) what is your favorite drink to drink?
COFFEE

24)when did you get the internet?
IN THE 80′s

25) who are you voting for president?
LEANING TOWARD OBAMA

26) what is your favorite kind of cake?
CHOCOLATE CAKE – CREAM CHEESE FROSTING

27) what us your favorite kind of cookie?
OATMEAL RAISIN

28) has anyone ever been rude to you on this site?
NO

SION29)are your paretns divorced?
NO

30) do youl like this survey?
YES

Carol asks…

My life sucks please read it all and try to help me out. If your a troll don’t comment please.?

I grew up in the ghetto and most of the time it was hard growing up in the ghetto, age 14 I started using pain killers and smoking weed. I needed money for my addiction and didn’t have a job so sadly I started stealing and gang banging and started selling weed to feed my addiction. I started stealing from my family manly my grandma like her rings necklace’s cash (I payed her back when I got a job but still to this day she can‘t trust me and she don’t want to talk to me) I felt and feel bad but I needed to feed my addiction. I think I started using drugs because I was molested right before I started using drugs… My grades where never good in school (50% up to around 60%) only time I had a good grade was in history I got a 98% in that class. the drug use and gang banging carried on till I was 16 and a half when my little niece was born (I was still gang banging and selling weed) my sister gave her new born baby over to my mom so she could stay with her boy friend who beats her. My mom has health problems so I had to step up and help raise my niece at the age of 16 and my mom didn’t get a lot of money so that’s why I continued to sell weed. I stepped up cause I didn’t want her to grow up with out a father like I did. Later on when school started after the summer (I was still 16) I picked up a construction job to make extra money to pay for dippers, formula, whips, cloths and toys. Basically every thing a baby needs. ( When I had the job I was still in school) so I would go to school 3 days a week and take 2 days off of school a week to work plus weekends I would work to pay for everything she needs. That went on until I was 19 then I dropped out of school the year I was suppose to graduate :( Then I went full time work to help with the bills, rent, food and for my niece and that’s when I stopped selling weed.. work got slow and I got laid off so I got a job at no frills. They let me go and now I‘m looking for work again. But I don’t want to do this my whole life going job to job!
I am now 20 years old a high school drop out and still raising my sister’s kid (now she’s 3 and a half) and my sister don’t pay any money for her kid every thing that she needs comes out of my pocket and I dislike it what can I do??

My doctor say’s I should go on disability because I have knee problems (witch makes me slow when I‘m working) and I will need surgery on them soon But I‘m afraid of not working and not getting money to get the things my niece needs/ wants.

I want to go back to school so I can finish my grade 12 and go on to collage to study about video editing or maybe becoming a cop seeing I didn’t get caught for all the dumb stuff I did. But I really want to drive a tow truck for a living with in the next 3-5 years. I know they don’t make a whole lot of money but I find it really interesting and I had helped my cousin a few time towing cars and I loved it.

I spend my days looking after a child and trying to find work and at night time when I relax, I‘m on the internet or on XBOX live..
I don’t hang out with friends because ALL OF THEM are gang bangers and I don’t want nothing to do with that life again because I know for a fact if I hang out with those type of people again I will NOT be clean anymore so I need new friends but I don’t know how to make new friends!

Like I don’t know what to say to new people because I have trust issues. I was stabbed twice and I was robbed gun point so I get sketchy around new people for some reason and I know there all not like that but I can‘t help the way I feel about it..

Sorry that was really long but PLEASE HELP ME OUT!!!

Administrator answers:

First you should take some credit for what you are doing for your niece–that’s very noble. Well done and carry on. You have the power in you to make it all the best you can imagine. You can achieve anything you dream if you do the necessary steps to get there.

I know a trucker that makes about $100,000/year. That’s no pocket change. True, he practically lives in his truck but even with that he makes his travel time count by studying L. Ron Hubbard on the road. He listens to LRH lectures on the mind and spirit to elevate himself to higher levels of ability. He never gets tickets or gets into accidents. He is trusted with the most valuable and delicate shipments. He supports the whole family so that his wife does not have to work so that she could help educate the kids. The kids are now finishing college and are all doing very well. The kids were also educated with the technology of study of LRH so that they could study anything on their own.

This is just one example, but I know of hundreds, some of them were addicts, like myself, and are now doing great thanks to the same technology developed by LRH. I did the Narconon drug rehabilitation more than 15 years ago and never relapsed. I’m doing great and as part of my contribution I volunteer to help others recover from addiction to drugs. Actually, even if you already cleaned up yourself there is a lot to gain from doing this program.

For example, one thing that no other program in the world has is a way to really clean the body from all the toxic residues from drugs, pesticides, food preservatives and other environment poisons that we encounter in a daily basis. This toxins get stuck in the body and give us cravings, depression, low energy, sleeplessness, etc. Narconon has the sauna detox, which helps you get rid of all that junk.

When I did this part I felt like a kid, full of energy and felt really happy. It is an amazing felling of cleanliness. Also my general health improved like 100 times. After the program I rarely got a cold and never got sick since.

This part of the program could very well help you handle the problem with your knees. I know that doctors will keep giving you prescriptions and surgeons will want to operate on you. But I believe that you could handle it on your own by getting very healthy in your body and your mind. I personally know few people that got cured or improved while doing the detox part of the program. This tells me that this toxins could be what is making some of us sick.

The other amazing part of the program was the educational part in which I learned many new skills to confront and handle all aspects of life. There is not one day that I do not use this skills, whether it is to handle people or problems. They gave me skills to study, to communicate, to handle the conditions in life, to handle suppressive people, etc.

Study the pages in the Narconon website and check if there is a way for you to do the program. If you can’t do it at this time at least study its methods. Another thing that has helped thousands and thousands of people is the Volunteer Ministers website. There are 20 free courses that help one solve all kind of problems, problems with drugs, children, marriage, organization, education, etc. Study the chapter on Children, it will help you deal and understand them better, It helped me raise my children. Each of this tools you learn here are gold mines and have saved me several times. Check them out.

You are doing the right thing by not going out with losers, gang bangers, low lifers. There is a lot of good people out there that they genuinely like to help others. Seek good friends, they exist. Think not only on your future but that of your niece. Would you like her to end up like your sister or worse? She is now your daughter. Think of it as a game worth playing. You are a very good person and are going to succeed. Follow my advice, okay?

George asks…

Please HELP!!!!!!!!!?

Well I have to take care of my niece and newfew. (he is 11 she is 8) this summer for money. I took care of them last year and they can be a great handful and I need your help to give me some ideas to entertain them and some desiplainary actions but not whipping them Please help me I don’t know what i am going to do with these …………….kids

Administrator answers:

You can take them shopping, walks, go to the park, take them swimming, rent movies, go to the movies (probably matinees would be best), go to the beach, have them play outside in your yard, there is a whole bunch more, but there are some examples.

Disciplining kids that aren’t yours, hmm, thats a toughy. How do their parents discipline them? It is best to keep it consistent. Unless if they spank (not hit) them and you feel uncomfortable doing that, then don’t. Time outs, canceling plans (going to the beach), would be good. Just talk to their parents how they would like you to handle it, would probably be best. :) Good Luck

Sandy asks…

Is this essay well written? Please read.?

The assignment was to write a 5 paragraph essay describing your neighborhood. Please let me know if you find any spelling or grammar mistakes. Also, do you think the last paragraph is too much? like to deep then what is called for? This is my Honors English summer work for 9th grade and i really want to make a good first impression.
Alexis (last name)
Honors English
Summer Reading Project
My neighborhood
I live in a small neighborhood on the outside of (city); mostly everyone here knows each other. I suppose that’s my favorite thing about living where I do, the sense of community, of feeling safe in your environment. That feeling can’t be found in many of the neighborhoods in (city), or even on some the streets that frame my own. On those streets the cars zoom by, honking their horns and screaming vulgarities at the children playing, and leaving litter in their tracks. On the inside of my neighborhood it is calm, you can hear the children playing, the dogs greeting them jovially, the birds singing, and the occasional car going down the street.
Many things are within walking distance of my house. There are two general stores, where you can find adults picking up dinner or lunch, kids buying candy and small toys, travelers getting a cup of coffee, or just whoever, buying whatever they may need. There is an elementary school, where you will most definitely find young children playing together on the cheery playground, and teens on the basketball court. Also, there are two churches, where many attend, and whose triumphant bells can be heard all around the neighborhood on Sunday mornings.
My neighborhood is very diverse. We have all races and incomes all living together peacefully. I can literally look out of one window of my house and see overgrown yards and rundown houses, and then look out of another window to see carefully landscaped yards, and beautiful homes. I think this diversity is another thing that makes where I live special; it allows people to learn to live together in peace. I believe that it teaches people not to judge someone on how much money they have, or on their appearances.
Neighborhoods are like snowflakes, no two look exactly alike. My neighborhood has a lot of trees. They line the streets and spot all the yards, shading everything from the rays of burning sun. Almost every yard is fenced in, for most people have dogs. The streets are pure black ink, with no yellow or white lines to interrupt it. They are all on an incline. Many like to race their bikes down the hills, reaching high speeds while the wind whips past them. Some people have gardens, while most do not. There isn’t much of a sidewalk, where there is one it is bumpy and cracked from the unlevel ground and stubborn tree roots breaking through it. Overall my neighborhood is a good-looking place to walk through, besides a few neglected yards and houses.
All of statements above are what I believe give my neighborhood it’s personality and make it unique. My point of view is this, houses and streets don’t make a neighborhood, the people who live there do. People may move in and out, stay near, or go far; but once you are a part a neighborhood, like a brotherhood or a sisterhood, you always will be. It’s not where you live, it’s who you live with, even if it is only in your heart.

Administrator answers:

After *outside of (city);* instead of ; you should possibly rephrase it to, *outside of (city), and almost everyone here knows each other. The next part is well written (but I am no expert) except with *or even on some the streets* change to…or even on some of the streets…minor thing…this sentence *On those streets the cars zoom by, honking their horns and screaming vulgarities at the children playing, and leaving litter in their tracks.* Personally to me it sounds too long, maybe like you are trying to get a point across but using too many words in one sentence to get their…try modifying it, (not the context just the wording of it), it is well written, especially for your age. Be careful with Their and There, (im a few years older than you and even I have a difficult time with them bc I spent years using them incorrectly)…*There are two general stores, where you can find adults picking up dinner or lunch, kids buying candy and small toys, travelers getting a cup of coffee, or just whoever, buying whatever they may need.* I would recommend rephrasing that sentence as well…it seems like a run on to me…Now as well written as it may be, the adjectives may need to be toned down a bit, writing well does not always mean telling the reader about a place or person and then jam-packing the sentence describing it. *Also, there are two churches, where many attend, and whose triumphant bells can be heard all around the neighborhood on Sunday mornings.* I may change that to, *In my (city/town) their are two churches that you have the option to attend, and Sunday mornings are filled with the sound of triumphant bells.* (maybe not exactly like that?) of my house changed to in my house…*i would think about omitting the snowflake remark…only because it is an overused phrase and you don’t want to sound to the (audience) like you are trying too hard to get their attention, *even if your intentions are simply to write something well*, be careful with commas, their are several places where a comma is not really necessary…read the sentence out loud and in your head and only place commas where you pause while reading. I really like the ending, only the last two sentences seem like they don’t need to be their, end it with…the people who live their do. *their* instead of trying to make it a longer paragraph. All in all, really well written for your age, you should maybe start taking classes to hon your talent while you are still young and can absorb information…good job and good luck with it.

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